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Thursday, August 20, 2020

Memories!

This week as part of our work we where working on show not tell. We got given 5 different images that we had to do a piece of writing for from what we could tell from the picture. My favourite one so far was Memories and this is my piece. Enjoy!
The woman is frozen as she sees the tree. The heat carved into it more than 15 years ago still stands brightly within the mist of trees. Her dog brakes loudly, the noise echoing through the trees but she didn’t notice. Her mind flashes with memories of her and her sister, playing at the beach, the playground and at the school fair back in year 6.
‘If only I could bring her back’ She thought, pressing my palm anaced the engraved shape.
No. There was nothing she could do to bring her back. And, nothing she could do to make up for what she did. Tears don’t count as an apology.
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2 comments:

  1. AnonymousAugust 20, 2020 at 1:52 PM

    Hi Clara, Wow! This was really cool, great job! Really good descriptive writing and good scene as well. Just remember who's point of view your telling the story from. Aside from that, its pretty good! From Abe.

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  2. AnonymousAugust 21, 2020 at 9:22 AM

    Hi Abe
    Thank you for your comment :)
    I will change the point of view now so it stays the same throughout the story.
    -Clara

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